Saturday, December 11, 2010

Six Sentence Sunday

So you know that feeling you get when all the pieces fall into place and something you've long suspected, but didn't want to believe is proved true? My character Seb, in my just-released Model Christmas, has that feeling as he talks to a stranger in the street near his home. His boyffiend has just left, his rent is due, and he's broke. This stranger seems to be feeling him out for something or other, and Seb's not sure he wants to know what.

"You rented with Terry Mulligan."

 Seb stopped. His heart pounded a fierce, wild rhythm. "How did you know that?"

 The man shrugged. "We slept together a lot."

That throw-away statement explained so much that Seb had suspected about Terry's distant behaviour but couldn't have proved and hadn't really wanted to admit was probably true.

We'll get back to Jimmy and Cliff next week, but in the mean time, pop on over and enjoy a few more offerings from the rest of the Six Sentence Sunday blog.

17 comments:

Lisa Fox said...

A mysterious stranger. I like it!

Rebecca Royce said...

We slept together a lot? That is awesome!

Jayel Kaye said...

I really like this. Such an off handed comment to mean so much

Eleri Stone said...

Ouch. That had to hurt. Like this bit of dialogue, really packs a punch.

Jessica Subject said...

That's one of those kick to the stomach comments. Nice writing.

Sandra Sookoo said...

well that's a fine how do you do. Nicely done!

Christa Paige said...

Nothing like a dose of stark honesty to start things off. Totally curious what's going to happen next.

Dee Carney said...

Uh oh. I have a feeling this conversation will not end well.

Jaime Samms said...

Landon doesn't want any false pretenses with Seb, Christa.

Dee, it certainly doesn't start out well, does it?

Marsha A. Moore said...

That bit of truth must have stung. Great dialog.

Jaime Samms said...

The truth often does, marsha, but Seb's not a complete fool. He had his suspicions.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Enjoyed this. Spare and lean and packs a gut punch.

Jaime Samms said...

Taryn, the most effective punch you never see coming, and while Seb knows Terry's not exactly faithful, to have someone just say it...ommph

Joleene Naylor said...

Well done! Love how the revealing statement is just something casual - so true to life!

Jaime Samms said...

Life isn't always about the Big Reveal, but all those little throw away things we do and say.

Hailey Edwards said...

*wince* That's a tough comment to stomach.

Jaime Samms said...

Truth can be kinda tough sometimes, huh, Hailey? Somethimes it's better that way. Like ripping off a bandaide.