Saturday, October 23, 2010

Six Sentances from As Advertised

My current WIP, now off to beta is the source of this week's six sentances.

There's nothing like some good phone sex for first time sex between a man who's nervous about getting involved physically, and one who's not sure he's ready for the emotional bond.

For a few, endless seconds, he could concentrate only on the next breath, the next, sweet, diminishing flow of pleasure, and didn't even realize he'd dropped the phone until it clunked against his temple on his pillow. He put it back to his ear, to be greeted by quick panting, and low, fluid moans, the perfect counterpart to his own still unsteady breath.



"Enjoying yourself?" he asked, a satisfied smile curling his lips.


"Shit. I'm—Ungh. Close—" A sound, like a deep-throated, worldless plea came over the line. "Ty!"

19 comments:

Chris said...

Ungh!

Jaime Samms said...

holy crap! I posted that, like thirty seconds ago! lol!

(I hope that's a good Ungh! and not the *groan* kind...)

Chris said...

LOL - it's in reference to the discussion at Kris's about "ungh"! :)

Jaime Samms said...

I went and read teh post. I understand now ;p

Chris said...

Context. Strangely important.

Lisa Fox said...

Very hot!

Jayel Kaye said...

from a girl who used to be one of those phone sex people(It was good money), it was extremely realistic. nice.

Dee Carney said...

Wow! That's one of the best descriptors of phone sex I've read in a while!

Emily Cale said...

Oh my! That was absolutely wonderful.

Rebecca Royce said...

Really loved your six sentences. So well done!

Eleri Stone said...

I really love that the phone hits him in the head.

Christa Paige said...

That last bit is just, dayum. Hot.

Jessica Subject said...

Phone sex and humor, (when he dropped the phone) I loved it! Very suspenseful at the end.

Lex Valentine said...

Jaime, you always manage to wind me up! LOL

Taryn Kincaid said...

Nicely done.

Ungh.

and clunk.

and TY!

Jaime Samms said...

Chris; context...helps. :)
And that was just the last six sentences of teh scene, Lisa.
Glad I hit teh mark, Jayel. It was an interesting way to write sex, for sure.
Woot! That's good news, Dee.
Thanks, Rabecca and Emily :)
Elri, I tried to imagine how it might go. The phone would be the least of my worries! lol!

Jaime Samms said...

Considering there was no real dialogue, Christina, it worked out all right

Sex shouldn'r be all serious all the time, I think, Jessica.

Hey, lex. Worked up in a good way, I hope!

Taryn, sometimes, the words just write themselves! lol!

PG Forte said...

very nicely done.

Jaime Samms said...

Why thank you, PG :)